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Heaven's Beach

The beach is so inviting, the water is so cool,
I race along the shoreline, as usual act the fool;
The turkey is escaping, I cannot eat it here,
Like me it can walk freely, it has nothing to fear.

The breeze is light and airy, it blows on you today,
Caressing you it beckons and asks you out to play;
It will be like thanksgiving, together we will be
The beach is so inviting, this is eternity.

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  • NeonRose
    June 26, 2008

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    Reading the contest rules, prompts, and story really helped me understand this write..well done, poet. It was a difficult thing to write on, and you have handled it well.

  • Judith Chandler
    June 25, 2008

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    like the lines about the breeze asking you out to play. The references to the turkey are interesting, quite original; I suppose there is a link with thanksgiving.

    Enoyed this write.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    June 6, 2008
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    this poem cheerd me up. i feel as if i have no cares today now ,good luck pp


  • Talking Toni gold member
    June 3, 2008

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    Divine!!!!!!!!!

    This is such a divinely written piece here, very uplifting and comforting for one ready to leave this world, crossing over into an eternity of thnksgivings with God...How awesome it will be!!! Very nicely done!!!~~Toni~~


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    June 2, 2008
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    truly a peaceful poem for Pete, cute and upbeat, good luck in her contest..
    Lin


  • montiebatmom
    June 1, 2008

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    Precious piece here. One usually tends to think of Eternity as this place where there is love and sweetness, but very little humor. I think you've broadened horizons on that while keeping it beautiful. Good luck in the contest!
    Bless,
    Montie


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    June 1, 2008
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    Beautiful and light, I love the subtle hint of humor you added to this piece.

    Blessings,
    Sassy


  • stavykm gold member
    June 1, 2008
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    So Fun and jBeautiful

    Oh he will love the humor in this so thank you. All those Thanksgiving dinners on the beach will bring a smile to his face. Beautiful poem. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.
    Many BLessings
    God Bless
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm

  • goalsv
    June 1, 2008
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    Very light yet deep in emotion. A wonderful, hopeful poem.

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