Surrounded by a crowd of misery, in the sea of despair
I can't see anything in it's dark depths, I can't hear anything but my own heart beating
I try to cry out, but my voice betrays me, and all that comes out is a silent scream
I twist around wildly, searching for an escape, but it's all in vain
All i can feel is the cold grips of insanity, tightening onto me like a vice
How did I get here, how do I get out?
I reach out to find something solid, anything but this tantalizing darkness, but all my hand closes on is air
I walk around this maze of deception, searching for it's end
But around every turn, all there is is darkness, it stretches on forever
I finally give in to what I've been denying
The undeniable truth, I'm trapped
Author notes
this is option 2 and I am 15 years old.
A contest entry
- CALLING ALL TEENAGERS...... by InfiniteCaitlin.
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ohh this is a nice write thanks for expressing your feeling within it!
and that you got good talent
keep it up hope to read more
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this i very deep and i can so realate to this so thanks
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thank you anny you're so sweet
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Ohhh this one is very unique. I like it alot. Deffinitly a prose so thats major points with me. i think the only thing you could work on is watching how many times you use the word I. But other than that this is great! amazing write thank you.
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