You planted me
In the pot
You fed me
Lies
You watered me
With a little care
You showed me
A little sunshine of hope
Even if for just
A little while
I've even poked you
A few times with my thorns
For that
I am sorry
But then as a little time
Went on you've forgotten this rose
And slowly and surely
As roses do
I've withered away
and I'm left here to die
You don't even notice
Till it's to late
And you never even said
Goodbye..
Author notes
PD
1. the pain of loving someone who doesnt love u back
In a list
A contest entry
- Love/Invisibility by phynix.
390 points, ended June 9, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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Very nic write.
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OMG! I love it! It made me CRY! i cant believe this!
much hugs sis!
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Amazing, i love the way u portrayed urself as a rose
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You really captured that feeling! I know that one well, and I think most of us can relate to that!! Which really is sad.. sometimes it certainly would be easier if that weren't the way life was huh?
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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I love the way you compared a person to a rose...if a rose isn't taken care of it withers and dies..same as a person without love and attention. I know in my life when someone is showing me love I come alive!! When I'm without love I feel dead!
Great poem and wonderful pic to go with it!!
Best if luck in the contest!!
your sister
darlintlc
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Aww this is really a wonderful write hun... the metaphor of the rose is done beautifully...
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naww loved this poem. its so sad but yeah loved it! the picture is so gorgeous! it fits so well with the poem. xoxo zoe
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Is 'feed' supposed to be 'fed'? only youve put all of them in past tense except that one lol
Anyways i love that...the endings really sad! But it all works really well. Great write xxx -
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yes thank you... im retarded is all... thanks for catching that....
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