Oh, how wicked breath that seeths
vicious words that spew such seeds
and turns to fire the saint's prayer beads.
Her tongue then fills the cold night air
and disdainly with mouth declares
of neighbors' most private affairs.
But she leaves out the points so true
as she clings tight as if with glue
she'll speak of them and then of you.
Take light her words as they spill free
for I am sure you will agree
her gossip is her lit marquee.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired. by Naridill.
700 points, ended June 2, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was amazing, Mom. You did an excellent job. Congratulations on your much deserved trophy.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Wow..what a great job you did with this!
"Oh, how wicked breath that seeths
vicious words that spew such seeds
and turns to fire the saint's prayer beads."
Amazing write! Congratulations on the Bronze!
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Thanks, Rose. So glad you liked this one. I was a bit amazed it came from me.
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Very good - I have one of these in my past, and I was moved by the description. It is quite true, if she gossips to you, she will gossip about you.
Congratulations on your trophy!
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So true. Thank you, Margaret.
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I think we all know one of these!! So much truth in your words and perfectly written with flawless flow and rhyme!
An outstanding piece you have penned here for this contest Sis..
A very creative take from the prompt given!!
Excellent!! All my best to you in this contest!!
Linda
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Oh I've known a few gossips in my day. If only the mute button would work on their remote we'd all get some needed peace. I would tell you what I really think of them but I must be polite here...lol. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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I love it!!!!! It flows really well and the rhyming isn't forced good job darling!
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Oh the flow here is perfection.
Outstanding. Best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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What a terrific job you did with this poem. You vividly describe that gossipy person that we all know. Your wording was perfection, and imagery was terrific. great job.
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This is the perfect description of a malicious gossip. I have often wondered if they ever listened to themselves. Or heard someone else talk about them! Very unique and fitting take on the picture. Good luck in the contest.
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My dear I think you have hit on a touchy but very true subject. The gossip of the harlot next door. Boy this give me flahsbacks, not always good. But so much truth in these words. There is one line I love especially
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Very nice imagery! I know its been awhile BUT its SARA DAWN!!! I do hope you remember me but if not thats okay, We're in each other's favorites and I am so happy to be able to come back and read your masterpieces again. I love it! Best Wishes in this contest!!!! I hope you win GOLD!
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Sara, Darling, it is so wonderful to see you again!!! Thank you so much for your sweet comment, and I'm delighted to know you're still here. Hugs, Patricia
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I have read many a great write by you, some made me laugh , some made me cry, some were just sheer beauty, but this has almost left me speechless. It is flawless in presentation and reads like something by the "greats of so long ago". And I know her [or KNEW her]The problem is that her marquee was so brightly lit that it still blinds those that ever have been exposed to it. And unfortunately there is no electrical chord to yank out of the wall , nor any batteries to be taken out of the sign. It is as if it is mocking all and everything and it is impossible to "take light the words" Somehow they have remained and play over and over like an old record album that is stuck. Anyway , my friend GREAT work and best wishes in this contest,
much love always,
reenie
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Oh, I'm sure you have known her. Some do leave their impressions as they trample the grasses and pretty flowers around them. Eventually they will all grow back and that light will go out! Thanks, Reenie. Hugs, Patricia
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Powerful and intense but very well written I wouldn't expect any less you are a gifted writer. You bring the subject to life through emotion of the topic of reflection. Best wishes in the contest. ♥
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Thanks, Sweetie
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Oh you have ferreted her out in this. Well written.
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Thanks, Buddy.
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