It was something that was supposed to be
Forever
And the words: "Nothing lasts forever" has meant more to me
than any other words that escaped the lips of
the one who
held me when I cried
the one who
gave me strength
the one who
I fought for...with my heart.
It became something that my heart couldn't take
the lies
the apologies that I could see through so easily
She didn't want to be Alone
Oh, She didn't want to be Alone
Thus, she took my strength from me
She forced it into herself, MY strength
So, selfish
(But we're all selfish bastards in some way)
and She talks with people "easily" like I did
and She's confident now, standing on stolen strength
But I see through your facade
(Did you forget the way I always read you like an open book?)
I still see the girl who fears to be Alone
the girl who desperately jumps from one person to the next
clinging
binding them with words of "I love you" or "You're my best friend"
The words you fling at me now, to let me see that you're better than me
(Oh, please, Karma, slap her in the face. Wake her up!)
I know you're scared; but they say mantras work
if you repeat them long enough
Just to let you know, my strength has returned to me
With some bitter words, but it's here
It told me to take things only at face value for now
Nothing lasts
Forever
A contest entry
- Lazy Saturday PIF by ShadowsMidnightRose.
600 points, ended June 2, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Will you please tell me what you think? Constructive Criticism is greatly appreaciated!
Comments
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This is perfect, but it goes WAY over the word limit. I really wish I could pick your's because it has so much emotion to it. The only thing I would suggest is maybe combining a few lines such as:
the one who
held me when I cried
the one who
gave me strength
the one who
I fought for...with my heart.
The way it is at the moment seems almost a bit choppy, but it is just a suggestion as it is your poem not mine.


