She sighs
her lovely petals
shattering
as if wounded hearts
consoled
by rosy cheeks
relinquished
in soft loyalty
~yet again~
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http://meeliah.deviantart.com/art/Snapdragon-60417517
The poem expresses the death of the snapdragon!
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Very creative and terrific choice of words. Thank you for sharing.
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You deleted my previous comment??
I don't really appreciate the "fancy" formatting because I don't like form poetry, but I appreciate the time you took to it. You could have simply messaged me or replied to my former comment instead of deleting it. I have nothing else to say to express how appalled I am. -
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I am sorry..but I did not! I just replied to ur comment saying ah..well! That means I am flatered! I did not delete ur comment! Anyways if u think thats the case...go ahead! Coz if u would think ur comment was really nice and why would someone delte a nice comment! Anywayz..
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Weird...because I don't see my former comment here...When I was trying to judge the contest, it wouldn't let me and then I saw 'Not viewed by judge' for your poem, which I HAD viewed & commented. I assumed you'd deleted my comment...
Guess it's an AP.com glitch? I thought those didn't exist. :S
Sorry about the assumptions...although I still don't see my former comment now. :S -
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This was ur comment
This certainly sounds like a "soft death" as the title would imply. Great verb usage of 'relinquished' and I like the phrase 'in soft loyalty'.
Thanks for entering. =]
shows on ma nets and on your contest it showed not viewed..weird!
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