Leaving Lover's Lane,
Haphazardly lost my way.
Stumbled into the ghost town
of Old Heartache today.
Was trying to move forward,
But got stuck here and forgot.
Decided to make the best of it,
and carved out my own little spot.
Where the weary and broken
often go to catch a break.
To forget about tomorrow,
while swimming in past mistakes.
Sitting here on yesterday,
while playing out the past.
Remembering happiness's touch,
and how it disappeared so fast.
Took a mental vacation,
checked out for quite a while.
Now, I'm back and patiently wait
for love to show her smile...
Author notes
2. Something sad or heartfelt
In a list
A contest entry
- "Prewrites " + Plus by wingsofgold25.
600 points, ended November 20, 2008, 67 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Challenge You! by Shadowsong.
400 points, ended April 22, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A very unique piece you have written.
The metaphors were well used and the flow was real smooth,nice write.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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good job!
this was so unique! i loved the metaphors you made for the place you go when you can't find love! the poem flowed wonderfully and it had a great sound to it! beautiful! hope you do well in the contest! -
this was very refreshing to read good luck in the contest its the best so far
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i remember these thoughts.. those long days where all i did was cry and beg for vacation from life itself i understand where the poem is coming from and if this is truly Your feeling i hope for the best and that you find ones true love! great write! keep on penning!
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I've been to that town before, very welcoming place, misery loves company
I think all of us move backwards from time to time, yet, without the past how would we ever be able to enjoy the future?
Beautiful penning, take another mental vacation and
blessings,
Sassy
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lovely poem ,with a optimistic ending. we all spend time waiting for that mysterious thing called love. sometimes we even find it.
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happiness's touch - that is a tricky one with the grammar, i am not even sure myself with it lol i would have said it as happiness' touch.
a good poem, we all need a break rom the madness i reckon, doesn't matter who we are, we still need a review on oursleves.
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Heartache, Heartbreak, Then to happily wait! This is Great! Its a great way to look at lonliness. Glad I checked it out!
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Like this very much. Love, C
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