You walked away
Leaving me languishing
Whispering my name
One last time
Has left me echoing
Constantly replaying
Your sweet resonating voice
One thousand times
Missing you
Your empty slippers
Drape my heart quietly
And your lingering scent
Left my heart bleeding
For every word spoken
And every emotion we shared
Left swimming in the air
Around me.....
A contest entry
- Semi Quickie by Cerulean Sunrise.
1000 points, ended June 1, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Prompt: "Missing you"
Comments
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I really like this...it definitely affects all those who have experienced loss...you can feel the longing in the poem. Excellent work =)
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I liked this very much.
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Aww so sad!! Such a haunting feeling in this, being reminded of love and left longing!
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You spoke your pain in words of total despair. It captures the reader and holds their attention until the end.. Very well done.
Soulful Woman
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BRAVO!
I really like this.... its sweetly sad, and the structure is wonderful!
I LOVE: "your empty slippers drape my heart quietly" ....great imagery!
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