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Everything But You

Be careful for what you wish for

Because dreams can turn ugly

Look on the flip side of things

You'll never know how bad it is

When you're not watching

 

Innocent introductions

Blinded by false beauty

Couldn't see your double meaning

Your dangerous cryptic messages

 

I couldn't survive without you

Tried all I could to be better

So you won't look at someone else

 

My instincts tell me you're a monster

My heart warns me for it is soon to be broken

My soul's uncomfortable when you're around

But my body tells me that I need you

 

Days past & memories fade

& I think of 

Those times when I tried my best

To be someone perfect

But someone away from you

Someone that's everything but you

 

(we can't be together)

Author notes

"I tried to be perfect, tried to be honest
Tried to be everything that you ever wanted
I tried to be stronger, tried to be smarter
Tried to be everything but you"

-- "Everything You Ever Wanted" by Hawk Nelson

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  • Ginger Woods
    December 2, 2008

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    The first line was a real catcher, you hear it so many times, and suddenly it's unexpectedely there. I liked the line "because dreams can turn ugly".

    "tried all i could to be better, so you won't look at someone else" I feel this all the time when I'm in a relationship in a way, I always worry they'll look at other girls so I try to make them happy and make them like me more then them, it's a real bad habit. And needing somebody but knowing they're not good can be the hardest thing you have to deal with in life. The ending was amazing "we can't be together" it was the best ending to this poem. Sorry if this comment sound's a bit odd I wrote it when i was reading your work, part by part, over all it's a fantastic write, thank you for entering it :


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 6, 2008

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    This is great. Why do we always want to ignore our gut instincts, you'd think we'd learn. Good poem, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • NickelleteXninja
    June 18, 2008

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    I liked it

    It was brilliant and I like how you quoted hawk nelson


    Very well done

    thanks for entering