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[ immaculate moonlight ]

immaculate moonlight
trills trickles borne beyond
my window shade


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  • azure85 gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    immaculate moonlight
    trills trickles borne beyond
    my window shade



    You have a good concept to begin with, the sight of the moonlight, the sounds of the birds. (if that is my correct assumption of trills) I am going to think on this one, and return for some more comments later. I like the beginning very much,


  • DogFish silver member
    June 1, 2008
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    riviting !



    as if silver rivers fell
    in cascades from the heavens


  • myron silver member
    June 1, 2008

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    confusing

    this haiku confuses me. i'm not getting a clear picture from these images.

    what is/are 'trills trickles'?

    best wishes,
    myron.


    • sheltered
      June 1, 2008
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      I can't blame you man.
      Guess i should put the fucking dictionary down huh?

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