Through the engulfing black of night,
Into darkness you've withdrawn,
The path ahead may not seem bright,
But know it is almost dawn.
The past's mistakes can't be undone,
Things haven't gone as planned,
But by your side I can be the one
To listen and undertand
Your smile is dark, masked by pain,
Lost in a world of black,
But behind that frown your grin remains,
And I want to bring it back.
If a life in darkness is what you desire,
I'll lead you off that path;
Save you from the blazing fire,
Pull you from evil's wrath.
Every fight for you I've faught,
It's hopeless but I'll persist.
Your safety threatens my every thought,
I'll guide you through the deluging mist
I have fervently prayed and prayed
My hand extends to pull you through
The paths you're on make me afraid
No matter what, I care about you
Through the engulfing black of night,
Into darkness you've withdrawn,
The path ahead may not seem bright,
But know it is almost dawn.
Author notes
My AP daughter, brightsmylesxx edited this a LOT and so I would love to take credit on this but i really cant =]
This is about a person I know who is experimenting with bad stuff. And I'm worried about him. And so yeah.
THANKS BRIGHTSMYLES <3
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This is a truly awesome write
I pray your friend takes your hands and he will see the light before he finds that the drugs have a high cost and that sometimes its too high .We are all out there with our hands out to him for we have seen both sides and their is only one he can win on and be free and truly happy .
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Hello, I edited you poem A LOT!
I hope you don't mind, I think it's better, but if you don't like it, I'm sorry. You can change it back if you would like, my feeling won't be hurt, or maybe just a little. I changed the rhyme scheme and everything completely. Basically I rewrote the whole thing, but I kept the basic meaning. I'm very sorry if you don't like it but I was trying to help. I hope its okay. Please read it and tell me what you think. Don't think I didn't like the original so much that I wanted to change it, it's just it sparked a creative interest in my head and I wanted to make it better in my opinion.
~ Bright Smyles
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