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gods living seapods
~ talking with mouthful of ash ~
soon a burp follows
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Author notes
Pic Credit:
www.earthmountainview.com/volcanos.html
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Traditional Haiku
5-7-5
No punctuation is used on purpose -
A contest entry
- Just arrived by special delivery by Black Rayne.
500 points, ended November 12, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on the bronze!!
Hehe an awesome write, made me laugh
Goes so well with the picture. And superbly executed form, great read! Congrats on the bronze 
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FANTASTIC
haiku is one of my favorite forms and this one is just brilliant
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Hello
Thank you for the encouraging comment.....the KU' is also one of my Fav.'s.....I hope you get a chance to join my Haiku' Chain Contest...
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2426117
...God bless you,
Bear ~
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don't you know you're not suppose to spew with your mouth open
awesome!
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This made me smile...actually laugh out loud...what an interesting prompt photo!
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Ew, I hope that they at least covered their mouth when they burped! Bad manners indeed! lol. This was a funny read.
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I saw patpowers' comment and wanted to check this out.
I've seen it before but had no time to comment.
I like the sense of humour in this pleasant haiku.
it's set up well and has a good twist -
Wonderful Poem
Hello My Bear friend You have penned a terrific Haiku. The picture is awesome and your words are so fitting with it!!!! Alway a pleasure to read your form poetry. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Fitting few words for this picture. Enjoyed the read - wishing you luck in this contest.
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WAY TO GO ARKBEAR!
Your haiku is awesome! Even the picture fits the description. I ENJOYED THIS!!! Thanks Arkbear!
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Perfections and picture enhancing words of nature. You always amaze me with these beautiful hsiku's. Just a joy to read and enjoy your artist ability. Thanks Bear....novy
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gods living seapods
~ talking with mouthful of ash ~
soon a burp follows
What an AHA moment, and a beautiful haiku you have created. Now I hear in many cultures it is very politie to burp after a meal-but my mother didn't go for that at home.
Thank you for a lovely haiku.
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Haiku is a form which I have yet to try, but this makes me want to... very good
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This is great Bear Best of luck to you ~Bret~
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Hi Bear! I am not usually a big fan of haiku but this is really good. You've managed to say a lot in very few words.
Kathryn
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wonderful
An excellent take on the prompt Bear.I love the way you have written and displayed your poem.You are always a pleasure to read, and I hope with time that I will be able to one day, write as beautiful as you do!
I wish you all the best in the contest my friend.
Take care and many beautiful blessings to you and your family.
Your friend in poetry,
~Angel~
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