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Rainstorm

Rain is pouring, pounding, tumbling down
Smashing, splashing, on the ground
Sliding droplets down my face

Water, cleaning, cleansing, everywhere
Soaks my skin, my clothes, my hair
Silky water, precious grace

Crashing, flashing raindrops sting my skin
Blinding, dripping, from my chin
Opaque curtains swinging closed

Misty, foaming clouds slide racing by
Mantle fringes swinging high
Forgotten faces, strangely posed

Wind blows, stirring, rushing, brushing soft
Lifts plastered hair to dance aloft
Howls wild music in my ears

The storm is in my blood, a joyous dawn
O, happy tempest, surging on
You leave the sweet-sad taste of tears

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MeNoEmo - Ladybug lands on lee

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  • XxNinjaNemoxX
    September 12
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    Wow... I really enjoyed this one.
    Such imagery... the last line especially stunned me.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck to you!
    xoxo.

  • izzy1804
    September 4
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    VERY good imagery....I really enjoyed reading!!! Good luck!


  • Symphony
    February 16

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    WOW -

    I don't think I've ever read such a VIVID imagery of rain ; with each separate section, you portrayed a different viewpoint of rain, and varying sounds and sensatations - just - wow,

    i'm going to have to go back and read that again, it was so ALIVE! Excellently written!

    thanks for entering

  • ecrivain01
    February 9
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    Hmmmmm ...

    This actually isn't a bad job. Unfortunately, it's not punctuated, so it has no chance in my contest. However, since it's been entered in so many others, I'm sure it will place somewhere.

    Thanks for entering.


  • ASmileForYou
    December 10, 2008
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    This was very good! A strongly developed rhythm and rhyme scheme, it flows smoothly and unforced. Very nice write!


  • Miss Chievous
    November 26, 2008
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    That was awesome! I felt Like I was in the storm too!
    Great rhyme!

    Thanks for entering!


  • nilav
    November 15, 2008
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    words flow like torrential rain.. beautiful...congrats on the trophy


  • Kiss the girl--x
    November 15, 2008
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    this is really beautiful, i lovelovelove the imagery you've used.

    thanks for entering

    ♥


  • Sunkissed xo
    November 14, 2008

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    This is a stunning write, I love how you have depicted rain! Every word here is powerful and beautiful. The poem builds to a beautiful climax that is just so utterly moving, it touched my heart. I especially loved the ending line, it was perfect! This is a wonderful write, thanks for entering the contest

    peace xx


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    October 25, 2008

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    One of the best descriptions of rain I have read in- forever. Very good descriptions, imagery... An absolutely wonderful poem describing something otherwise simple, although nothing ever simple to those who look close enough I suppose. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • trekkergirl
    October 23, 2008
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    wow boy can I say this for you... you really know how to use imagery well. I don't think I have seen rain described so well as how you have put it in this poem. I can also see how it has won so many trophies it is an excellent write. Great job and thanks for entering it in my contest.


  • Ana-Andrea
    October 13, 2008
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    Especially liked the mist and the wind. All in all it's a very wet poem! Thanks for entering. Best wishes, BookGirl


  • Tercil gold member
    October 5, 2008
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    You're almost dripping wewt with this one, out in this, wriitng the experience, 'Opaque curtains swinging closed' could be visualised looking from either outside or in, but a lovely read for us to decide.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    Very good. I love the structure as well as the flow and rhyme. All were well done and you stayed away from the typical weather cliche lines. I'm impressed. Also You ended it will adding an incredable twist. Great job and thanks for entering my contest.


  • Ftw lol
    September 25, 2008
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    this isnt really what i was looking for but thanks for entering my very first contest anyways!!!!!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 6, 2008

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    This is really great. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Walk-Free
    September 3, 2008
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    round 2

    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2419787


  • Beauty Of Silence
    August 24, 2008
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    wooowe! this is awesome!!! i love the rhyme, it did not seem forced at all, as it flowed just so perfectly! keep penning, it was wonderful!

    ~beauty of silence


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 19, 2008
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    I noticed you entered this in my past prewrites contest. I specifically asked for this contest in my rules, no entering poems already entered in previous contests of mine. SOrry but I will have to DQ this.

    You are more than welcome to enter another write, just a different one.

    Again, i'm sorry. Your write is beautiful, but it was part of the rules

  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 19, 2008
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    I noticed you entered this in my past prewrites contest. I specifically asked for this contest in my rules, no entering poems already entered in previous contests of mine. SOrry but I will have to DQ this.

    You are more than welcome to enter another write, just a different one.

    Again, i'm sorry. Your write is beautiful, but it was part of the rules

  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 19, 2008
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    I noticed you entered this in my past prewrites contest. I specifically asked for this contest in my rules, no entering poems already entered in previous contests of mine. SOrry but I will have to DQ this.

    You are more than welcome to enter another write, just a different one.

    Again, i'm sorry. Your write is beautiful, but it was part of the rules


  • misshugglebugglez
    August 15, 2008
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    I really like this! This definitely has a chance in my contest. I especially enjoyed the 2nd and 3rd stanzas. really awesomely amazingly greatly wonderfully extravagantly....uh, i can't think of another good adj.
    well, you get the picture!


  • Frodofan silver member
    August 15, 2008

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    I really like the last section best. Nicely written. I love the rain too.

    Thanks for entering.


  • letters to no one
    August 12, 2008

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    Ah yes,
    The rain

    I like this a lot actually.

    I can't find anything I didn't enjoy =]

    Keep writing,
    You are talented


  • transit
    August 10, 2008

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    wow!

    I love the beautiful imagery and the rhyme was just as amazing. I could feel every likne like as if the rain was pouring down on me.

    "Soaks my skin, my clothes, my hair
    Silky water, precious grace"

    such beautiful line. almost made me wish I were there. I wouls just like to know what "Transatlanticism" means. Good luck in the other contests too and congrats on the lovely silver!! good luck in this contest too!!

    loveees,
    transit~


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Wow; this was so amazing. Beautiful imagery and metaphor. Definately a poem worth reading.. thanks for sharing. Loved it!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    August 10, 2008

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    I really, really like this poem. I love the descriptive words such as those in the first line:

    "Rain is pouring, pounding, tumbling down"

    Ahhh-mazing!

    Thank you for entering this wonderful poem in my contest!


  • checkmate
    August 9, 2008
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    wow. this was a great piece. the imagery was just brilliant- you have described a rainstorm so well with a great rhyme scheme. once again, yours is one of the best rhyming entries

    great work here. best of lucks to you.

    -checkmate


  • Angelflower
    August 8, 2008
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    I really liked the flower of this piece.. It's wonderfully crafted and the imagery is very vivid and detailed.. Thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck in the contest..

    Angel


  • SignifyingNothing
    August 3, 2008

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    Wow, this is great, it really captures the feel of a rainstorm. I especially like:

    Wind blows, stirring, rushing, brushing soft
    Lifts plastered hair to dance aloft
    Howls wild music in my ears

    Good imagery in this too. And I can agree with you on how hard it is to pick a 'favorite' poem- though I had to limit everyone to just one, or I would have had 1600 to chose from in my contest instead of 160! Great job with this, and thanks for entering. Good luck!


  • Hetha gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    The rhyme scheme is well done, and the imagery was wonderful. I tried reading it out loud though, and I would have to agree with Rakerman1, the flow is slightly off, but it isn't bad.


  • Avatar of Innocence
    August 3, 2008
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    Well, thanks for entering this piece into my contest and good luck in this one and all the others.


  • Rakerman1
    August 2, 2008
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    Excellent imagery! Your flow was a little inconsistant but your rhyme scheme was nicely done.

    Great work
    Raker


  • JustsimplyKatiee.
    August 2, 2008
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    good luck.

  • ecrivain01
    July 28, 2008

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    Not bad ...

    and I agree with your cheering section. You've done a credible job with this.

    Thanks for entering.


  • rosie4491
    July 27, 2008
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    The imagery in this poem is absolutely dynamic. "Silky water" "Lifts plastered hair to dance aloft" ~ Wow. Just wow. Wonderful pen. Best of luck in my contest.

    Keep it up =]


  • thearmsofsorrow
    July 25, 2008

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    I like this one, but i dont think it really counts as creative/clever/witty in my mind
    it was a nice write tho
    so i shall consider it of course
    but not realyl what i was looking for. the descriptions you used were, in short, amazing.

    i really love this verse:

    Misty, foaming clouds slide racing by
    Mantle fringes swinging high
    Forgotten faces, strangely posed


    wow all of these are so good judging is going to be really difficult!
    thank youse for your entry
    cheers

  • VeritasLiberte
    July 24, 2008

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    I like the tempo of this, and the way you paint a picture in the reader's mind of the rainstorm. In fact, I can almost feel the downpour now! Yikes! I need an umbrella! I'm getting SOAKED! Man! Your poems are TOO realistic! Now see what you've done!

  • piccola silver member
    July 22, 2008
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    I love the very last line. Internal rhyme is not always easy to do so I appreciate that too.

  • Topnotchsy
    June 26, 2008

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    Great write. Just responded to your message and this poem definitely reinforced the idea. I enjoyed the rhyming, and found the internal rhymes (smashing/splashing, crashing/flashing) added a lot to the poem and made it flow even better than it would have without it.
    Besides for the structure of the poem, the poem itself, its message, it's image and its idea were also really good!!

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