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all children are as glass

 

 

 

 

 

i)

 

it is a naked thorn,
 
a deep seed
settled
beneath the shining wall,
 
a conduit of touch
that pins us
beneath our border.
 
 

 

ii)

 

within this duality
there are two kinds of dirt:
that knelt upon,
which is harsh, dry
and arid;
 
or that contained, which is fluid,
a young mind, still
able to swallow the sea,
still open beneath an endless
sky-
 
open and therefore alive
in its movement.
 

 

 

iii)

 
of all things bound
to growth,
 
each reflects self
and other the same
 
but when aged too far,

too often

such light inverts.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Virgoan
    June 14

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    Wow! I am a fan of vignettes and this one is one of the best I've read in this site. Honestly, all parts are beautiful but personally the second one really sticks into my tongue.

    Brilliant...lovely as always.

    Keep sharing.



    HENSLEY

  • "within this duality
    there are two kinds of dirt:"

    Another amazing write


  • Naridill
    June 11
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    Beautifully written.

  • Night Hope gold member
    June 3

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    "but when aged too far,
    too often
    such light inverts."

    Yep. 'Twas worth every one of 'em.
  • i think the pre-emptive strike was more than worth it
    pity i can't give three more happy clappy men
    this connected deep within me for many many reasons

    beautiful, thought provoking and the new title fits perfectly...

    fragility
  • keep the title
    it has a good ring to it lol!


    • EvilKate gold member
      June 1

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      *squinty eyes* You're as perverse as Wanda ... you two are only encouraging others you realise?! - bad bad girls!
      • oooooh i like being called peverse! reverse, reserved!!!
        all words that match!
        it's sunday and i wish i WAS a bad bad girl!

        i ain;t around much these days so know i am missing good stuff so the clappies were just in case i missed the finished article which would no doubt be worth at least that nmber
        and who says i can't applaud enthusiatic titles!??

  • Night Hope gold member
    May 31
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    *shuffles around the room* Good luck in the contest, my fearless Friend. Wanda


    • EvilKate gold member
      May 31
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      You nut! - you can't give three clappies to an unwritten poem! *shakes head with a smiling sigh*

      • Night Hope gold member
        May 31
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        Poetic license. 'sides, I just did. Hey, I considered the source & knew it would be worth at least 3. Wish they'd let us choose the number. Sometimes, 3 just isn't enough.

        • EvilKate gold member
          May 31
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          Hrmmm - well I see the licensing bureau visiting someone soon.

          *snorts* I should now pen the worst poem EVA ... with sTicKy cAPs and wanton EMO rantiness

          • Night Hope gold member
            May 31
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            Go fer it. I'd love to see ya try. As for the poetic license...I ain't kiddin'. It's in my purse. Courtesy of my membership in The Academy of American Poets. I wield it often & well.
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