Never a care
nothing to regret
no reasons down here
to ever be upset
Gentle and harmless
and floating free
Oh how I wish
that this was me
Peace is calling
but its voice.... is loud now
A contest entry
- Pcture Prompt by stavykm.
450 points, ended June 6, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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beautifully written Mark! I love how you placed this little poem together:::: and the ending, is back to reality. I really enjoyed this. LOVE, prettypoetry
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I can hear Ringo now...
"I'd like to be
under the sea
in an octupus' garden
in the shade."
I like this piece. Simple and honest, and blue...
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I wish it were me too!! Oh what a life, at least at first glance. Great take on the picture. Best of luck in the contest.
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Yes So Peaceful
Never a care,
Gentle and harmless
and floating free
Oh how I wish
that this was me,
Oh and then the last line. This is fabulous. I really enjoyed this poem. I felt so light and free without any worries or cares in the world just living in a beautiful moment. Great imagery with feelings and some rhyme too. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Made me feel tranquil as well. Nice little change of direction in the last two lines.
Brazos
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This is pretty daddy. I wish I could be like that turtle too. I love you and good luck
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