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Was It Not Death That Set Me Free?

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  My heart has cried a million tears,
and then a million more.
I've voiced to God my unquenched fears,
until my throat was sore.
On bended knee I've prayed and wept,
I've fasted long and haven't slept.

I begged of God, "please answer me,
do you not hear my prayers!".
"All this pain do you not see,
or do you even care?"
With heavy heart I closed my eyes,
stifled my tears with laboured sighs.

I drifted into restless sleep,
then came this vivid dream.
I saw a mountain very steep,
beside a flowing stream.
"Climb that mountain!", a stern voice spoke,
"I can't", I said, "my back is broke."

"But all your burdens I now bear",
this stern voice spoke to me.
"You cast to me your every care,
and that has set you free."
I gazed into this flowing stream,
most certain now this was no dream.

God heard my every tearful prayer,
it was I who could not hear.
For even though I cast my cares,
I held onto my fears.
Now, death no more shall worry me,
was it not death that set me free?
 

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  • Denerica
    May 18

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    I loved the cry out, so often I too would be like that as well, definately flows with ryhme that cascades to the pic of the waters, the cup to reach for, beautiful and a testimony for sure. Excellent, thanks for entering. Blessings.


    • sassylilpoet silver member
      May 22
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      Thank you for the contest, and "Waiting in Expectancy", allowed me to re-read what I had written quite some time ago, I too, needed to read this again at this moment in my life (amazing how at times we can draw inspiration from our own words) Just goes to show how many phases of life we go through, birth, living, trials, tribulations, death~re-birth, more trials, tribulations...ahh, but at the final end to have everlasting life, final rest and peace, and life more abundantly than we've ever known it...yes, it will be worth it!

      Blessings,
      Sassy


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 10, 2008

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    I love good rhyme rhythm and flow when accompanied by strong emotion. Wonderful to read this piece and enjoy. It is amazing how quickly we forget the listening ears of a greater one.

    Beautiful verse. Telling and pure. I enjoyed this very much. ~Pamela


  • CatherineL
    June 9, 2008

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    I don't know what to say. it's incredible. thank you, it's touched me in ways i could never imagine. good luck! xxx


    • sassylilpoet silver member
      June 9, 2008
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      thank you Catherine, and I do hope that you found some comfort from your grief in this write

      Blessings,
      Sassy


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 31, 2008

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    I think a lot of folks going through many different things will easily relate to this poem. [including me] I've said many times how do I give my burdens? After much thought about that, [I too been told that often] I realized it comes down to 'trusting' in God. 'Trusting' he will carry your load.

    ...I like your write for the inspiration held within. I know this will touch many who needs serenity.

    Thanks for entering the contest - Best of luck to you in the round.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    You have written a very touching poem. It is a great tribute to your aunt. Your ability to bring your emotions across with such carefully chosen words and complex rhyme is truly impressive.

    Great job!!

  • StormAngel
    May 31, 2008

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    Water! Water! Water! The great metaphor and quencher of spiritual thirst.

    If more people knew how to die, so many more would learn how to live.

    Loved it! Thanks.


  • MissStranger
    May 31, 2008
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    My words are useless...I will apllaud in absolute silence!!!

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