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Eddy in ¾

When sullen clouds engulf your very life;
torrential heartache floods your inner soul.
You may see release from the winds of strife
but soon you will cower and lose control.
When inclement trials of life take their toll,
the human spirit cannot fight the storm...
for defeated hearts soon die and conform.

Let the cleansing rain calm your mortal heart
and let our souls waltz in the morning mist.
With your hand in mine the waters will part,
embraced together the storm will subside.
We’ll dance through wind like the rolling tide
with knowledge that tempest cannot postpone
the strength of two lovers; our cornerstone.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt:
Life is not about weathering the storm
It's about learning to dance in the rain!

Rhyme Royal:
The rhyme royal stanza consists of seven lines, usually in iambic pentameter. The rhyme scheme is a-b-a-b-b-c-c. In practice, the stanza can be constructed either as a tercet and two couplets (a-b-a, b-b, c-c) or a quatrain and a tercet (a-b-a-b, b-c-c). This allows for a good deal of variety, especially when the form is used for longer narrative poems and along with the couplet, it was the standard narrative meter in the late Middle Ages.

 

 

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 14

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    Congratulation on the gold. You have a very good write here, this is wonderfully written and it was a pleasur to read.


  • Sprite silver member
    June 27, 2008
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    This is truly lovely and very nicely crafted. I see why you won. Congratulations! ~ Joyce


  • BluesMan gold member
    June 27, 2008
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    All i can say is I love this entry. Rhyme Royal is yet another form of poetry I did know existed. Rhyme and flow was great and you stayed on point with the prompt


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 7, 2008
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    So true

    The dance of life is what we make it to be for life was meant to be celebrated through dance

    • Amera gold member
      June 7, 2008
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      thank you for the comment and the applause


  • Ithica silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    The first half sounds like my life... even more so after reading part two... But I've finally got off my lazy butt, and have commenced to DATE again... Woot-woot!!! [I have pics of my suitors... hehe!!!]


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    this was so inspiring! Hope you don't mind that I print it and read this through the course of this day.

    Your poetry has the ability to strenghten me!

    3 bunnys but deserving of so much more!

    Becks


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 31, 2008
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    You and your words dance extremely well.


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 31, 2008
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    Excellent poem, with a wonderful flow, rhyme and balance. A full picture drawn with your words.


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    May 31, 2008

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    sis your the master of verse and rhymes u simple rock i love what you do and what you create you're simply stunnnning
    i love you siss and good lucks in da contest


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    This is pretty good stuff, Sis, strong and robust meter and form, with the two stanzas nicely balancing ideas. You need to take a little bit more care with punctuation, though, as it does affect flow and (as important) meaning.

    No slavish adulation, just praise and encouragement for good work. Keep honing.

    A brace of bunnies, and one for luck.


  • StarEyes
    May 31, 2008

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    Ok, Sis,

    You are right!! I know what you mean, and this shows it well. We both know this dance well, don't we. What a great read!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • NeonRose
    May 31, 2008
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    outstanding in form and content! Love it!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 31, 2008
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    I agree with every word Jade said, can't think why ...

  • Jade Jefferies
    May 31, 2008
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    Great meter and rhyme, terrific use of rime royale, and every time you use it I melt!


  • PerVirtuous
    May 31, 2008

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    This is simply a beautiful Rhyme Royale! The Iambic pentameter is wonderful. The image is unmistakably you, and the flow from one line to the next is extremely fluid. I can see the leaves spinning around our lovers as they dance in the blustery winds of the storm. What a great image. Bravo.

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