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Tread

Do not fear to trek the darkened path,
Breath the night in, as you walk in this
world of endless sin...

Hearing souls weep,
but shedding no tears.
Climbing the mountains
Where the Gods once stepped,
Now bones and ashes are all that is left..

Fear rolling through, a soul once divine
Not showing the look on this face that hides behind,
An arrogant smile and a careless caress.
Not showing the fear of death that waits within this place
Tortured by mindful thoughts, as it hears the darkness
whisper soft..
let go... Come and play, there is no use to
search for the day, of when your God will send his loving Angels this way..

Strength renewed, though unknown from whence it came...
Fighting on another day, for what is at the end of this journey?
No one knows. Yet unwilling to let these selfish demons rip my soul..

Do not fear where I have tread,for someday soon,
I will tell you of the Angel who lead me to, this peaceful place
Where now my soul may find sweet rest.. Within the arms of the one
I love, yet I would have never known if I had
                                                                given up...

Author notes

Quote Prompt:
"Those who fear the darkness have no idea what the light can do"

Rules:
1. No more than 30 lines please.
2. Enter which prompt you have chosen within your author notes.
3. Please adhere to the 2 rules and have some fun musing.

I know that it's not the greatest but I warned you!!! And I know that it's over 30 and if you want you can DQ me.. But at least you cant say that I didn't try!!!

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  • Volfeng
    June 5, 2008
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    this is gorgeous...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 1, 2008

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    What a story you have penned for that prompt!!! Wicked sis!! I especially loved the italiced part!! Wow.. gorgeous internal rhyme in that..

    Excellent write!


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    May 31, 2008

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    holy cow what an awesome write..... good think you didnt give up..... love ya sis.... hugs...... thanks for sharing and goood luck in contest..!


  • SEA angel gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    As true as Winston Churchill's words

    "Never, never, never give up."
    We wouldn't walk out on a good movie or close a good book not reading to find out what happens in the end. Our lives are of far more value so lets all plan on making our lives a best seller... by living...


  • darell
    May 31, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Encore encore! what a extraordinary display
    of creative writing. I loved everything about
    this poem. It had the air of mystery and intrigue
    aswell as rebellion and defiance. To not go siliently
    into the night so to speak. I must admit I was
    surprisingly impressed by this poem.
    You should be extremely proud because it
    speaks on so many levels. Great job!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    Very nicely done. I like the imagery in this poem. It promotes the overall feeling of melancholy very well. The last lines really summed it all up well. Great job.


  • Ithica silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    Wow! You dove into this prompt head first!!! A wonderful and thought provoking piece... Nice!!!


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    I had to read it 3 times in a row, it was that good. Why were you so worried about entering when you come out the such wonderful poetry.

    My favourite part:
    "Fear rolling through, a soul once divine
    Not showing the look on this face that hides behind,
    An arrogant smile and a careless caress."

    Keep up the great work hun x


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    EVER SO TENDER AND BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    As one has traveled that lonesome road and come out with renewed faith and hope they reach out to others who may be on that road and lift them up with their love and understanding.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 31, 2008

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    Fear rolling through, a soul once divine
    Not showing the look on this face that hides behind,
    An arrogant smile and a careless caress.
    Not showing the fear of death that waits within this place
    Tortured by mindful thoughts, as it hears the darkness
    whisper soft..


    Excellent SiS. gosh you so take a prompt on board , who cares if its over 30 lol

    excellent


    Cin


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    May 31, 2008

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    I got lost in this. I found this beautiful. Well done for this quite amazing piece of art here. Your emotions were really poured into this, Angel.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx

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