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No Reason No Rhyme

i.

 

 

There is no definition

for love,
no reason or rhyme
for why time
stands so still
in its presence

 

and I cannot pretend
to understand
how it begins or why it ends

 

but when I think of you
I have a clue
that love was never meant
to be picked apart

 

it is simply a key
to the core
of our hearts...




ii.

 

 

Secret languages

are spoken
between your thighs
and the sighs
you release
feel like ancient winds
against my skin
when we begin to unravel
the magnificent
mysteries
of body and soul...




iii.



Sky is wrapped
in the gray softness
of cashmere

you are here

 

asleep in the shadows
of a morning rain,

and I have no plans today

except to stay


within reach
of your dreams...

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  • Keith Drew gold member
    November 8
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    Love is a fluffy towel.


  • wbiro gold member
    July 8
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    the last lines are nice, but they do not speak of love, more of temporary obligation...


  • Sesheta
    July 26, 2008

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    Mystery in every word. Abstract yet so clear.

    but when I think of you
    I have a clue
    that love was never meant
    to be picked apart

    it is simply a key
    to the core
    of our hearts...

    Wisdom and truth I feel. And I love it.


  • IronMaiden1236
    July 23, 2008
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    WOW

    My skin tingles..too many amazing lines to pick..cricketjeff sent me...(bows)


  • Beating gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    How can anyone define love? I wouldn't ever have taken on that challenge, but I know that you live of challenges that are only for the utmost creative thinkers. I loved each part as individuel pieces, and they only complimented each other when put together. This should have won gold!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    July 8, 2008
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    Missed this one !

    You gave us the present with this, on your birthday!
    Thanks,
    Joe


  • pantress silver member
    June 14, 2008

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    asleep in the shadows
    of a morning rain,

    and I have no plans today

    except to stay


    within reach
    of your dreams...

    How Often I long for this kind of togetherness. The world sometimes seems so... empty


  • Ithica silver member
    June 5, 2008

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    Whatever love is... the idea of is becomes more enticing through the lens of your visions... and your skill for putting them into words... [More Sighing...]


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    This is one of your lovelier writes in a while.
    A trilogy of inner thoughts, desires and reflections
    of life and love. meaningful in several ways to all.

    Very nicely presented, it was more brushed upon the paged, than written.



    len


  • forty-one
    June 1, 2008

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    Perfection!!

    What a beautiful poem! My thoughts and feelings were all over the place. I especially loved "iii" the most. I've felt like that many times before. Seems like you're inside my head quite often.

    41

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 1, 2008

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    Wow. This is a really great set of poems girl! Very short and impactful. If I had to pick one, I'd definitely say that the second one is the one that made the biggest impact on me. I just really liked those ideas of those kinds of secrets and the images you used. It was all very pretty.

  • silverfish
    June 1, 2008

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    i keep reading this, but am a little bit at a loss. it's just lovely, but there is something else, too. your smooth and sensual voice is here, but it's like another one, too, whispering sotto voce. curious. -s


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    My Lady

    These are the words that wrap themselves around my soul. It is enriched for the symbiotic relationship, your words with my mind.


  • KayJay
    May 31, 2008
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    Fabulous! What a wonderous write... from start to finish... This is pure gold, Lane...
    Ken


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    This is absolutely breathtaking

    Love
    Sue


  • Cannonsfire
    May 31, 2008

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    This could almost follow on from your other piece, so soft and emotive are the feelings expressed here, like a warm bed and no intention of getting out of it. Love, C


  • sailor ptolema
    May 31, 2008
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    brava!

    so lovely, you have such a breathtaking view of love....


  • nordicsky silver member
    May 31, 2008
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    Oh Lane,
    This is just perfect.

    Love, Peter


    • Dalaney gold member
      May 31, 2008
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      Peter...

      You just made my day. Thank you, sweet Poet, for being here for me. Love, laney

  • tara wilson gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    Lane - this poem is gorgeous...
    "but when I think of you
    I have a clue
    that love was never meant
    to be picked apart"

    yes...it should never be...every vignette in this is excellent, enjoyed this read..

    • Dalaney gold member
      May 31, 2008
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      Thank you :)

      I feel it is such an honor to have one of the best poets on AP read my work and actually like it! lol I am so appreciative, my friend. Love, Lane


  • HaleyMary
    May 31, 2008

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    Beautiful write. I liked the third part the best. It seemed very sensual and filled with hope. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    this ballet piece you've drawn makes me want to be a forest stream waiting for a hot day to come along when you decide to go for a walk ... and gosh, its so hot and wouldn't a nice dip be just so lovely

    ...


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    So this is what you were working on! I wondered where you had gone.

    I like the way that each separate part has its own "feel" - each is subtly different. I don't know why I baulk at the word "thighs" in a love poem, but then I am sometimes irrational. The word sounds warnings in my mind; if it's in a rhyming poem, you just know that the next line will end with "sighs" (oops!). That second section is the one which I keep singling out and reading over and over to see if it works. It does.

    The last section is just so gentle. It makes me relax, after feeling some poetic tension in the second.

    Overall - well, I am glad you stopped IMing me, and spent your time (more profitably) writing and posting this. It's lovely.


    • Dalaney gold member
      May 31, 2008
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      Mairi...lol...you are so right about

      thighs and sighs, but darling, what two words sound better right now...this very moment?


      • cricketjeff gold member
        May 31, 2008

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        The sound of this is whole piece is so enticing, it is another dimension to your writing, I didn't think there was room for it, but it gives it another way to stick itself in my head, and they are perfect.


      • Mairi bheag gold member
        May 31, 2008
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        None... none at all! You're absolutely right.

  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 31, 2008
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    Sleeping in shadows and feeling your eyes
    Dreaming of touching and sighing fond sighs
    Nothing in loving is cleverly planned
    And only with you can my heart understand

    I love the form and the sentiments, I feel delicious reading this.


  • tomisb
    May 31, 2008
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    last chapter stunning.
    Love, Tom B.


  • paulcreates silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    Breathless...

    This may possibly be the most beautiful poem I've ever read.

    The tender sensitivity transmitted in this write
    can only be felt in it's true intended interpretation.
    My words are so inadequate...
    Thank you. Thank you. Thank you...



    Paul


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    what else one can react with the beauty of love when you touch it and turn in into the fascinating poetry...time and time again...well done..

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