Hell is
the darkest night
the deepest silence
the pain
no time can heal
the absence
of all love
the total
ISOLATION
of the SOUL.
A contest entry
- Quickie - About Hell by Dreamana.
300 points, ended May 31, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Short and punchy yet manages a depth that makes the reader think. Great piece and worthy of your gold. For me, the caps on "isolation" detract from the innate strength of your fine poem.
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no time can heal
the absence
of all love
the total
ISOLATION
of the SOUL.wow fantastic congratulations on your shiny thank you for sharing your poem with the group
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You nailed that one perfectly! Congrats on snagging the Gold! Great job!
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congratulations on the gold. We think alike...hell is the misery we feel while here on earth. There is nothing worse than the isolation of the soul.
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You've captured the essence of what hell must be in these few lines. I especially like lines 2 and 3.
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Thank you for the gold and the comments. It was exactly 10 lines as you said, and I agree sometimes brevity is best. Was this a PIF, I don't remember?
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This is powerful despite being the shortest entry. So often I have had to leave writes short rather than try to pad them out. In the end the simplicity and profound depth shine through.
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Nice write. It's short, but that works to your advantage. There's a lot of subtle imagery that I got out of this. I really like this.
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Nice interpretation of the prompt. Good descriptives. Nice flow and tone. Nice alliteration. Best wishes in the contest.
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Good write. Hell is a bad place. Hell is a burning fire and snatching teeth, and etc.
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