Negative as the no winged fairy dust
And sinking into 74% water sheets
Not even fairy dust healing the tonsils
Already rotten by the protesting screams
No will is freed: Closures are all around
Thousand inquisitions across the surface
Deleting, no, making unbearable life
Selling, buying, whoring yourself; a summary
Of the same destiny for those 46 gens' holders
Ladies and gentlemen: This is THE WORLD
Author notes
10 lines about my vision of hell... and it is: We're already here.
A contest entry
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Comments
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yeah..I get the hell part...
''46 gens' holders'' ?? I haven't a clue
and yes...it's deep alright, the metaphor is buried so deep, it doesn't see the light of day.
can you explain, or give me some clues? -
THIS IS DEEP YO! i was feeling it! you have some mad skills! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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like the crevassee thing...
Ladies and gentlemen: This is THE WORLD
^favorite line^
after reading this, i feel the need to kill someone
hehe you know you must have done something right for me to crawl outta my hole and say something.
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Quite a complex picture that you paint here. Yep, the world can seem like hell at times.
TY for your entry -
Interesting. very realistic. I like how you added a fantasy twist in there about the fairy dust, and liking that to real like
Wicked.
Sam
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