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she fell from May
like every Autumn Child-
 
with quiet eyes that hooked to noise,
touching around
the weight of needful things;
 
built a house of wood
and bone,
from silhouettes cast inside-out
where all was fully formed
of shadows
halved by fading light
and leaf.
 

 

 
there poised on cusp of dimming
days,
she drew so deep of hollowed air
that faith fell still
and trees began to dream
beneath her soil:
 
of  winter cracks,
of how all rain shall someday drink

the seed.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Month: May - now, I'm writing from the southern hemisphere, so remember, HERE May is the end of Autumn. (or Fall for you snow-landers).

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  • Naridill gold member
    May 31
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    Life should imitate your poetry more often.


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 31

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    "there poised on cusp of dimming
    days,
    she drew so deep of hollowed air
    that faith fell still
    and trees began to dream
    beneath her soil:"

    Exquisitely penned, my Friend. I am an Autumn child, born the day after it starts in September (here, within the wild plains). I was born on a Wednesday. My name means "weary wanderer". I was born/doomed/blessed to be a Poet from the first moment. I agree with Trina; your work is always vivid, original, thought~provoking & pure. Good luck in her contest, Sweetie. Wanda

  • Faithbound gold member
    May 31

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    This is beautiful. I love the imagery here. It is vivid and original.