Smell the rich and savory scent
as I contemplate with greed.
You're a recipe so golden,
and you're all I'll ever need.
Heat the room with blazing lust;
Time to bake the scrumptious tart.
You are now the biggest sweet
that I have craved in all my heart.
Add some frosting to the bliss;
Count the layers that we make.
It's the things we do so well
that put the icing on the cake.
Pour the sprinkles on the top;
Be a gift of worthy flaunt.
'Seems that all the world is hungry,
and you're all they'll ever want.
This dessert of fervid love --
May I sample the delight?
Let your flavor touch my lips
and give my mouth a single bite.
Author notes
This is a love poem... with a super-long comparison to cake.
What does this poem mean to you?
Comments
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mmmm...cake. Now you made me hungry!!!! I like the comparison between love and cake, It's an interesting idea. You also do a really good job of expressing the romance in this. Great write and Good luck in my contest!!
-Twila
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I really like this poem, you make such a good connection, and u seem so romantic and sweet
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This is totally awesome so romantic and so sweet absolutely love it
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This is brilliant you made such an awesome connection between cake and telling someone that theyre wanted simply excellent est of luck in the contest
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I decorate and make wedding cakes as my on the side job. I'm hella good at it, but I hate cake. My boss never has to worry about me sneaking a bite though! That's why I get paid more. Everyone gets a few bucks shaved off for those few licks of frosting they sneak.
Good poem. Cleverly done
Mylee -
I love all your work! you can see your jokes flow with the beautiful words
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effective extended metaphor, great, unforced rhyme scheme. great ending.
did find it a bit creepy, especially at the beginning. almost this greed, gluttony, or this ravenous hunger ready to devour every crumb of her (or him, i suppose, thugh i somehow envision a her). i don't know. found it almost sinister, a hint of menacing just beneath the icing and sprinkles. everyone else seems to find it cute and sweet though, so probably just me and my trust issues. but clever and well-written, in any case, nicely done. -
This is beautiful!!! And yummy, lol
Such sweet words- no pun intended! 
Great write! 
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Great metaphore. I liked it. Check out a poem of mine, if you have the time, called Just Dessert.
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Hee Hee!
This could have gone either way but you finessed it into a lovely sweet morsel for your reader to enjoy. I adore love poetry & I love cake so well done on both points!
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good job on this it shows a different side of love an lust. nice job and i hope that you will write more. because you seem to be a really good writer.
Bella -
i like the metaphor you chose, comparing love to cake! this is such a wonderful and sweeeettt write!!
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At first I thought this was going to be about an actual cake and almost didn't read it, Im glad I did.
Interesting comparison, I wouldn't of ever thought of.
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Sweetness!!!!
I thought it was a cute and "sweet" poem. I like how you compared love to a layered cake. There are many things to compare love to, but I think in my readings, that the cake is by far the sweetest. Great read. -mandie- -
great
wow i'm glad i clicked on this. this is mature and not cliche at all like many other love poems. this is seriously well written and i also feel hungry just reading it! nice one! thanks - jamie
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Now Im hungry... this is a really sweet poem, and very ... just cool. And what a way to make someone feel wanted, for who doesnt like cake. Great job... and great meter by the way!
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You amaze me sometimes. This is great.... But your forgetting Cakes Best Friend.... Choclate Chip Cookie Dough Ice cream! But anyway, This had wonderful imagery, and good feeling too it. Now I want some cake...thanks alot hun.
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now i want some actual cake! very well writ!
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Excellent conceit. there's some great imagery, and it was uplifting. Cake and love, you just can't beat it.
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Hmm when I saw this poem was entitled "Cake" I expected a tribute to the heavenly thing.. but the way you coupled love and desire with cake was PERFECT because they're both so awesome. Your love of baked good came through.
I really liked it - the sensuality you achieved with your words was great =)
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My my not what I was expecting to read when I read the title.
I have to say, this is bloody wonderful.
From beginning to end you bring forth a sweet sense of love so unique and charming.
Thank you for a delightful read this evening
Best of luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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