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Companion


Slobbering big-eyed reassurance,
laying his head on my lap.
As I wait for your return,
alongside this exquisite moon.



Author notes

Prompt:
"Warm skin
Wolf grin
And where were you?"
-Blue, Angie Hart


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  • KayJay
    August 3, 2008

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    No critique here Wonderfully compact without loss of meaning... and I really am a big lover so you had me at the opening ... Well done!
    Ken


  • notorious gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    I believe a hyphen (-)should be utilized in between "big-eyed".

    The first 2 lines allude to a wolf and the last 2 seem to coincide with the last lyric of the prompt, "And where were you?" The last 2 lines are wonderfully written and simple in their literal meaning...lots of imagery and descriptive details. Thanks for this entry and kudos. =]


  • Dmonik
    May 31, 2008
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    Short, sweet, powerful.
    Excellently written. I enjoyed this.
    Bravo!

    'D'