Whiter than fluff
purer than stuff
your love is...
Wilder than rain
softer than cane
I love you
Never the same
can't contain
want to be with you
Wrapped in desire
hot heated fire
will you say yes?
Never a dull moment
you've made a dent
can you feel it?
Struck by the quality
easing into the quantity
you belong to me
Whiter than the clouds
loving you out loud
never without you.
Author notes
Option #1 Title
A contest entry
- Song by Shya.
690 points, ended June 20, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Overlook made up words
Comments
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The rhyming sounds a little forced at times, and some of the poem doesn't make sense. For example, the word 'stuff' in line 2 is vague, line 5 doesn't make sense, and line 8 doesn't connect with the lines before and after it. I like how highly expressive this poem is, though. Thanks for entering.
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a good poem penned, love is a magical time in a musial land that spins the heart right into the spirit's delicate sunlight.
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