Pretend its okay.
Day after day.
But if it was alright
You'd be here tonight.
But the waves we call our lives.
Seem to drag us to the fight.
Here we go again.
Talking about our end.
The confusion of the day.
Thats getting in our way.
And these fears we try to hide.
Are the ones that come to life.
If the world was up to you and me.
Imagine what it could be.
A final rest for all out fears.
A loving place to dry our tears.
See the world ina different way.
Tomorow is another day.
Author notes
A song i wrote. I was VERY depressed and my freinds made it better[[2nd half of the poem]].
A contest entry
- Song by Shya.
690 points, ended June 20, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
I really like this song, how it goes from a little depressed to renewed hope. I wouldn't end each line with a period, though, as it interrupts the flow especially when you have one sentence in two lines or more. If you ever revise this, you may want to follow a rhyme scheme or write it again as free verse, unless the patched rhyming is caused by the melody of the song. I like the last four lines. Thanks for entering.
-
-
thnx ^_^. i was SOOO depressed when i wrote this.
-
-
this reminds me a lot of an actual song.
"if the world was up to you and me
imagine what it could be." -
-
hmm well i wrote it myself. what song does it remind you of exactly
-
-
i didnt say you didnt write it.
and i dont pay attention to the titles of songs. -
-
its ok. I was Just Wondering.
-
-
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
