Concentric rings
depict security’s daze.
Tiny vapors,
spider veins of time.
Wafting debris,
Earth’s forlorn tears;
saturating life
from velveteen skies.
As cosmic forces collide.
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Originally written January 20,2008
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very creative vocabulary used here to create a masterful verse about the forces of our wonderful universe - without and within ...
enchanting,
maa
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I always know when I visit your pages, wisdom and deep thought has been graced upon them.
This is such an evolving write, it could never be easily missed. There is so much that can be seen in it, that varied thoughts from different views could be made.
Such a clever mind and a creative way of portraying it too.
Terrestial life brought to the fore, with the force of nature at it's highest, just perfect.
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wonderful write....I love the wording and the imagery.
I also love the length...I am a big fan of short poetry that says big things.
awesomeness
Blessed Be
Tasha
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a good poem, i am a massive science fiction fanatic - i love the space/planet imagery here. 'spider veins of time' makes me think of little cracks in the make-up of everything.
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excellence is rare
the second stanza is perfect...and the title says so much
love that mind of yours
peace and hugs
Muddy
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