Mystical waves stir nature's breeze.
Inhaling purity; basking tropical sun
my blood dances while on shore.
Until I dive below;
then the briny drink caresses this
earth soul; one with her water spirit.
I am part of the ocean's vast utopia
as I glide, the silky wet swells
of glorious deep.
Author notes
50 words About the Ocean
In a list
A contest entry
- About the ocean by Uglyblackdog.
450 points, ended June 3, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Closes thing I've found to actually being in the water.
Very vivid. Congratulations on the silver.
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This poem was so vivid I could feel myself in the water!!!..very good job writing
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This is a very nice piece that encompasses the beauty of the ocean. You don't need a lot of words or lines or anything to portray beauty, and you have proved that beautifully with the sheer simplicity of your work. I liked how you incorporated a spiritual essence of the water into your poem; it was playful and serious at the same time, and it was very enjoyable. Thank you for sharing this with us ^_^
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What a wonderful piece. Warm wishes in the contest!
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