Suddenly stoked,
snaked a wave.
Caught a pipeline
the ocean gave.
Cross-stepping the stick
while gliding thru the tube.
Catching the ultimate ride-
You wouldn't believe it, dude.
The barrell started closing.
Euphoria transcends.
Forever was that moment and
I knew it had to end.
But I will never forget....
Author notes
prompt pic 20-50 words
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A contest entry
- About the ocean by Uglyblackdog.
450 points, ended June 3, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - NO CLICHE ! YES PREWRITES ! by Anu-Nataraj.
400 points, ended November 28, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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please read rule
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You wrote "unltimate" but I think you meant "ultimate." Grrr... typos!
The imagery in this poem was splendid. I felt like I was watching what you described. I will never forget either!
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thanks, I fixed that.
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Definitely deserves its award. I actually felt like I was surfing and I am not that brave. Congratulations on the bronze.
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I loved the rhythm here...made me feel like I was riding the wave!!..made me feel the "euphoria"
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