How long I've been on this train,
I have no idea at all.
I just don't want to get off,
because I'm afraid I'll fall.
I guess I'll just stay on,
until they ask me to leave.
I want to be on the train forever,
but what will I achieve?
Author notes
n/a, well I never usually have any notes anyways xD
A contest entry
- Great PICTURE PROMPT!! Quickie! by sailor ptolema.
451 points, ended June 1, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So how was it?
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Congratulations on the honorable mention! Very well written. I really like what you did with the prompt! Good Job!!!!!!!
~Kat *♥*
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Thanks
But I await the day when I get a gold trophy *drools*
xD
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This can apply to so many people in so many situations. Good job.
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Thank you
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Just like kayjay wrote...I like that you talk about a passenger's perspective.... and you ask such power life questions.
And I love that you describe as this need to cling on, to keep riding, is irrational...
sometimes its hard to let go and move on, and you display this sentiment very well.
marvelous job. thanks for entering and g'luck! -
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Thanks
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Interesting write... I like the view from inside the train rather than the obvious... Well done.
Ken
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Thank you
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