Where are my knights to fight the Templar?
I am who I am,
but you are not what you say you are.
There will be no space held,
for those who don't create space themselves.
I am sick of bleeding blood for these fucking parasites.
Slaving over severed concrete.
Unconscious under city lights.
Don't just sit there, ask me,
What we're going to do with you...
I'm gunna tell 'em your name.
Set your stories aflame.
Mend you with mead and mercy.
That is if you'll take me.
Semblance tastes like chocolate.
Soaring through space like some sweet rocket.
How long till will unites with spirit?
So we can both take to this sky.
Live like fire in the eye of God.
Outside of facade, realize our true divine nature.
Where there is no gap between reality and desire.
Find a place to be free,
where one can live out infinitely in infinity...
So where is this all encompassing love?
This solidifier they speak of?
A savior to save me.
The sweetest of sugar to caramelize reality.
A barer to give witness to the purest kiss.
The missing link between pain and bliss.
What if it turns out that the monsters,
are really our saviors.
The only ones who really know,
the deepest darkest place to go.
For monsters mirror what we did not want to see.
No time for distress or rest, please only whimsy
So the monsters go where we did not want to go,
We hid from ourselves.
Locking them in books on the highest shelves,
till we're ready to know what the monsters know.
But there will be no space held,
for those who don't create space themselves.
So monsters, its time for you to come home.
I cannot do this all on my own.
whats going on in your portals girls and boys?
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When true awareness was realized,
it was the dregs
of monstrous proportion...
the dregs of society,
murderers and thieves
that hung to the left
and to the right of Jesus.
proclaiming as they died,
"this man has done nothing"
And when they died ,
they were the first to enter
the kingdom of heaven.
Monsters from this life
and this world
sit beside him,
and hear our prayers.
Prayers that may save us all
and guide us back to ourselves.
There is know doubt your work should be in print.
I should be seeing this caliber of work on display in a N.Y. gallery....your gift is a gift to us all.
Much love my sister,
LOWELL
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when I first saw the title I said to myself: OMG it's a brilliant remix of Michael Jackson's song "Man in the mirror" .
"Locking them in books on the highest shelves,
till we're ready to know what the monsters know.
But there will be no space held,
for those who don't create space themselves."....you have such a powerful manner of expressing what you think!!!
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unlike earlier suggested, I think the format of this is great the way it is. I like the fact that they rhymes come and go. It seems more natural to me, like you werent intending to rhyme it sometimes just happens. The flow is already perfect as well. I think a rewrite could ruin it.
"So where is this all encompassing love?
This solidifier they speak of?
A savior to save me. "
that is amazing and my favorite part by far. Its so pretty, yet sounds so cynical and heartbroken at the same time.
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Wow...I was impressed by the impact of the poem. It struck a chord in me. "what if it turns out that the monsters are really our saviors?" I really like what the line implies what your poem/story implies. Great read. -mandie-
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"Find a place to be free,
where one can live out infinitely in infinity"
Beautiful wording. I love this piece! Look behind the looking glass! This has great imagery. I will admit in the beginning I did not understand, Everything started to come together at the end. Beautiful Job!
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So many important, often overlooked, questions in reference to salvation. The duality of good and evil can really suck for all of us, esp. when evil (the monsters) break the balance. The Creator, the omnipotent side, controls both, and all. Sometimes the only way to subjugate evil is to deploy evil against it. The good ol' game of fighting fire with fire.
I really loved this piece. Your depth is amazing.
Thank you.
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This has good thoughts; I would try a sonnet or formed version of this poem. You have rhymes in here but they are not constant throughout the poem and they should be it will reinforce the entire poem. I do love your thoughts here. I find it a very interesting subject. If you want me to look at it deeper let me know.
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Wow - powerful!
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Superb
A great write. I really like this one just as it. Marvelous imagery; rhythm also was fine. I wrote a whimsical piece called: Whimsical Funhouse Mirror, here's a link to it: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4276747
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Wow.
This is very deep and very thoughtful. The rhyming is great. The words you have chosen throughout the poem create a very palpable imagery. It is absolutely great.
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