Web's spun deceit
threads wicked ways
of tempestuous torment
Entangled by lies
we fall victim
to our weakness
Temptation cocoons us
with silken voice
her sustenance awaits
Fangs strike, nourishes
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt 30 words more or less or five lines...your choice by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended May 31, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Criticize freely, I need input to improve
Comments
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Nicely done! Love the word choice and flow...a wonderful twist on the prompt, as it seems to hold one's self more accountable...thank you for sharing!
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This poem has potential, but I think that the lines are too short and it makes the flow blocky and choppy. Words, obviously, are not your weakness, as proven by
'Entangled by lies
we fall victim
to our weakness'
I hope you do well in the contest.
~Winterfall~
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