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Sleeping:

Laying here and watching you,
Your breathing is so light.
And girl your just as lovely,
As when we made love last night.

An Angel while your sleeping
But I know when you awake,
You’ll love me like the Devil,
Giving all that I can take.

I would love to hold and kiss you,
But I’ll just watch you for a while
And I’ll thank the Lord I have you,
You make my life worth while.

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  • ea silver member
    February 13
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    another good one for your love list. ♥


  • Jesann gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    This is so beautiful!!
    You have a way of capturing a feeling and expressing it in simple verse..such that the reader can really feel your emotion.

  • Jesann gold member
    September 22, 2008
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    Oh so beautiful!!
    You have a way of capturing a feeling and expressing it in simple verse.. so the reader FEELS your tenderness and love!!!!!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    September 21, 2008

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    Stunning.
    Thank you for entering my contest.



    Delila

  • delightfulmess silver member
    May 31, 2008
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    Awe... This is so sweet nearly started the water works. Great job and thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • Harlequin Bunny
    May 30, 2008

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    In the last line .. did you intend it to say "you make my life worth wild" as a pun, or did you mean to write "worth while"? It really works either way, but it confused me a bit, so I thought I'd ask for clarification .. anywho, this was really cute .. I think any girl would love to be admired so while she slept .. personally, I grind my teeth,a nd toss and turn til I've stolen all the covers, so I doubt anyone's had a chance to worship me in slumber! haha


    • Beret55 silver member
      May 30, 2008
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      Well Bunny, i think most people would prefur (while)so i changed it. Thinks Bunny
      Steeling the covers is a good reason to cuddle up. hehe
      And i'm sure you would light up a fellas heart to watch you while your aleeping.


  • Kelli Marie
    May 30, 2008

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    This is a very nice write. A great take on the picture. I do think you mean life in the last line. Good luck in the contest.
    Kelli


    • Beret55 silver member
      May 30, 2008
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      Id , and thinks i changed it. I need to read my owns stuff before i print it.. hehe

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