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Lucas

The mood is set,

the lights are low,

the room is steamy,

you approach,

my hands reach out,

connect with skin,

i pull you close,

our lips meet.

 

Our bodies touch,

our sweat mesh together,

the smell so sweet,

our lips meet again,

the taste of salt upon them.

 

I lay upon your chest,

hair matter to my face,

out of breath,

my heart feels as though,

it is doing a jig,

inside my chest.

 

I feel you fingers,

trace my figure, 

I see my name,

radiate under the sweat.

 

The only words, 

I seem to say,

"I love you."

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  • poetrytoopeneyes
    May 30, 2008

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    Hi! This is a really great poem, but...
    It isn't in the writing style of dirty pretty.
    Sorry, I'll have to dq.

    If you look at some other entries in the contest, you'll see what exactly the style is.


  • crazibunni
    May 30, 2008
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    bravo...good luck in the contest!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 30, 2008

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    You are very true to your sentiments where love is the subject to deal with your beloved and that is the focal point of this wonderful poem..thanks for sharing...


  • Kelli Marie
    May 30, 2008

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    This is a very nicely done love poem. Very passionate. Tastefully written. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
    Kelli