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Summer Pastime

laying with head in
laying with feet in
stretched thus over my rock altar
surrounded by cool white-water

A contest entry

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    June 3, 2008
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    This is an interesting short piece... I like the last two lines - although maybe there could have been some other added detail in the first two (I'm not saying that I don't like it though )... the ending to this seems tranquil to me, and I like the tone... Thank you for entering this contest!

    Keep writing

    Polly