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The Sun My Shadow In The Night

A mirror reflecting each side of me-
is my right better than my left?
I mutter through a critical eye,
bones carved a skeletal figure.

I paint how I feel between each rib,
Stain the blood on each page,
Hollow cheeks; full, An obsession with what remains of me

  

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 The sun my shadow in the night.

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Dedicated to Jillian.
Love u mate

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  • meic
    November 11

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    Gives an excellent rendition of the hopelessness and helplessness of this horrific condition. Good firm writing.
    Mike


  • One Step Behind
    October 10
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    Wow, that's just putting it out there! great write.


  • nobodys-girl
    January 25

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    i love this. its short but perfect. the obsession part...well that was just wonderful . thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck


  • Darkwell
    June 21, 2008
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    WOW chilling introspection on anorexia

    great write!


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    June 3, 2008

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    sis these writesS:s why r they dark:S why are they sadd:S interesting topic u have penned i hope you are doing okie and all is good i miss you heapsssss when u go on plz leave a message plzzzzzzzzzzzz


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    June 3, 2008
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    sis these writesS:s why r they dark:S why are they sadd:S interesting topic u have penned


  • Cromedome
    June 1, 2008
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    speechless.
    short.
    and
    great.


  • November-Dani
    June 1, 2008
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    Love it.


  • InRegardsToMyself
    May 31, 2008

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    Wow! this was a powerful write, great flow, words, and um anything else lol
    loved it

  • aaaaaaaa
    May 29, 2008

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    wow nice. I really like the last line. interesting. and I hope whoever has anorexia can get over it soon. thanks for sharing.


    • InMyFlames
      May 29, 2008
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      thank you very much for your kind comment...
      it is muchly appreciated

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