Point out all my imperfections
and make up some for good measure
because it seems my misery
is everyone else's pleasure
[not that I think I'm that special]
Point out everytime I failed
Keep track of every wrong
Never let me forget a thing
Hell, why not write a song?!
Sing me a torment
at least that's something new
Tell me I'm worthless
and make me feel its true
[not that I don't already]
I know you can do it
Make me feel like dirt
because I know I can't take it
Make it really hurt
I want this
I need it
Break me
I need to feel this
[I can never get enough]
what do you think?
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wow, amazing write. you have some real talent. i hope to read more of your poems..
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how about Imperfections??
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but i don't really know i title for this sry i'll try to think of soemthing
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this is an awesome write
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That's really emotional. It reminds me of the poetry of one of my friends. I really really like it, you use a simple rhyme scheme and diction to get your point across, and you do it really well!
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its really good, i never anyone that wanted to feel like that lol its an awesome poem though!!!!!
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wow, thts realli emotional, and yeh, its all about trying to break the cyrcle reali of the repitition of the need sometimes.
chin up xx
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you never disappoint :)
excellent as usual!! In fact I think your getting better & better at this art
I can think of several people that I could apply this to, perfectly word for word & yes I especially liked the end, because it seems at times like we must need this, why else would we keep coming back for more? You deserve someone to sing your praise though! This is very well done short to the point yet with it's own twists & i nice rhythm & rhyme giving it an easy flow.
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