Like breaking glass from a broken window.
My fragile heart keeps shattering.
Your hands throwing about the pieces,
To the wind the pieces your scattering.
I don’t think that’s what you're trying to do
I think you can still care about me.
But how can you sit there and say you love,
When, in others arms I know you’ll be.
I like to know that your moving on,
But please don’t drag me along.
The days of you running back to me.
Treating me like that is wrong.
And even while I’m writing this,
In another arms I know you are.
And every hug and kiss he gets,
On my heart is cut another scar.
But still to you my heart I give,
Because my feelings I cant contain.
In frustration these words I’m writing.
I guess, I’m addicted, to the pain.
Author notes
This poem is written about feeling going through my head when talking to my ex who I still have feelings for. I cant seem to push myself away enough to save myself from being hurt. This poem was written May 22nd 2008.
In a list
A contest entry
- Give Me Emotion by A-Daisy-Among-Roses.
600 points, ended June 23, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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love it!
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Yay lol Glad you liked it.
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lol
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Silly
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*hugs*
aww you'll get there one day hun
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Yeah i know I wioll one day but how many years away is that?
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a true enough my friend..your sketches are indeed a truth..well done..and my thanks for sending this poem in my contest...
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Glad you liked it.
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wow.. that is an amazing piece of poetry!! thank you for entering!!!
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Thank you for the comment and I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Congratulations on your trophy.A worthy winner.A sad and emotional write, Ros
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Thanks Ros. I was suprised to win the trophy with this one. but it certainly was a pleasent suprise.
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wow i can so completely relate to this 100%. I was in love with an ex for three years and just recently got over him. It was probly the most pianful and most wonderful experiance of my life. The emotions you evoke are amazingly painful and beautiful. I love the ending completely. The is a very very good write.
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Thanks. The one thing I really try doing with my poems is making people feel what I write. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. And thank you for the award.
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the pain...
I remember being told that all artists were lucky, in the way that they could express strong emotion in their work, while other people could only let it fester inside of them.
After reading this piece, I understand what they mean.
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Everyone is an artist in one way or another. Whether it be with pen or paint or with thier voice or instuments. You just have to find what your art is. It took me 25 years to discover that mine was poetry.
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this poem is very easy for me to relate to for in the same situation great job
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I wish you the best with your situation.
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It's so possible to know that something is wrong and has turned into nothing more that a source of pain. Yet, ast the same time you can't tear yourself away.
Last line of the secondlast stanza needs work. It's inconsistant with the rest to say "they place".
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Yes your right and also thank you for the sudgestion
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Not gonna say too much on this one as we have been discussing the situation at length, but the write itself is good, i didn't so much mind the rhyme in this one, the tone of the poem carried it a bit more then the rhyme so i felt it much more.
nicely done.
TAsha
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Well Thank You. And remind me not to send you the links to me rhyme anymore
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always disappearing
1] you didn't send me this link I was making the rounds as I promised I would
2] don't send me links i always make my rounds
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Ahh ok
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nicely penned. i can see the sense of being stabbed in the back and having this relationship become a burden.
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I wouldnt call it a burden but it certainly doesnt make life more enjoyable.
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I too like the flow of the poem.It describes your feelings of betrayal well.It isn't good when you can't let those feelings of love go, especially when they don't deserve your love.I did find the poem a little difficukt to read on the background.Have a good day, Ros
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Alright and yes I have been meaning to lighten up the background a little. But I am glad you enjoyed it. And I usually can let go of things fairly easily. The only time I really have trouble with it is when I'm holding onto the hope that I can get back togeather with that person and my ex has hinted at that.
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Great write! I liked the way the whole poem was in sinc and very flowy. It made the poem more enjoyable and entertaining to read. Best of luck and thanks for entering my contest!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it and good luck with the contest.
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A very strong poem, laying your soul bare for the world to see takes a certain amount of courage. You will get over the pain in time.
All the best...Sue
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Laying my soul bare is one thing that I am apearently good at.
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This is very good. And only one mistake, which is in the second paragraph, first sentence should be "I don't think that's what your *you're* trying to do." This really should be a song. Thats what it reminds me of. Great job all together and keep it up!
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Thank Annie for the mistake. Also for future reference, a paragraph in a poem is called a stanza.
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This is a wonderful write hun..You expressed yourself so well.. The pain an ex can cause is tremendous.. And very lasting.. It's really hard to let go of an ex when you were with them for so long.. But if love is what you are looking for you will never find it in the shadow of a lost loves memories... I hope that things go well with you life hun..
Angel
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Thank You
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What Ms Brittany?
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Ahh I see.
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i definately understand the feelings in this one...but i agree with sassy i wasnt left i was the one who did the leaving...i was being emotional abused adn i couldnt stand it anymore...althought i would take him back in a heartbeat..if i thought it would make a difference
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Yeah I know what you mean.
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I feel your pain, and I've been there before...yet, it was me who had to walk away from someone I loved very much, yet I couldn't stay because of the abuse. I still experienced the pain of a broken heart. I am so sorry for your pain, but time heals all wounds and soon her memory will be just a memory You will meet someone worthy of your love.
Blessings,
Sassy
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Thanks sassy. And I'm pretty sure your write but going through the motions isnt fun.
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