Troubled with lies that stand cold of eyes,
think, naked decoration, following its shoreline,
in plastic nooks that spine its disguise
of rose glass bottles, drank of wine.
Think, naked decoration, following its shoreline,
where starfish sunbathed along the crab
of rose glass bottles, drank of wine
treading seaweed,scarce below grabbed.
Where starfish sunbathed along the crab
relishing this universe, if time stood to impart
treading seaweed,scarce below grabbed,
as we are driven to obsession art.
Relishing this universe,if time stood to impart
as we are driven to obsession art
of plastic life and glass promises, lore
bottled this shell among its sandy shore.
Author notes
Option 2 and 3.c.LIES, DRIVEN, SCARCE, UNIVERSE, SPINE,
- I.C. Winner
Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
In a list
A contest entry
- † Iron Poet † 3 by Penz.
450 points, ended June 5, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn your Green Trophies into Bronze, Silver or Gold (3) by Julie Leigh.
600 points, ended July 22, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a really awesome poem. I like this form of poetry. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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thank u
thank u for liking my poem. I see on ur authors page ur from Florida, what part? Haley27
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Your words
Relishing this universe,if time stood to impart
as we are driven to obsession art
are encredibly creative. Congradutaltions on winning an honorable mention on this piece great job and keep writing. -
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful comments and liking my lines on this poem. Haley27
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I just got a lesson in rhyme-o-nomics. Hehe! Good write, well written! It makes you think and think more!
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful contest u have here and thank u for the wonderful comments given. Haley27
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i love this poem it definely caught my
atention to read it and i liked it
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