Oh, my love, how I wish you’d only see
how I long to be held in your embrace.
Surely, it must be written on my face,
this deep love that I hold inside of me.
You’re the only one who can set me free
from this dismal prison, this lonely place.
Take me away, let’s leave without a trace,
I’ll love you with every breath in me.
A heart was never meant to beat alone,
but you’ll never be if I’m by your side.
I’ll be your diamond among all the stones,
I’ll hang on for every bump on the ride.
I’ll be there every step of the way.
Just take my hand and we can fly away…
Author notes
this is a sonnet, not sure what form, but a sonnet.
option 27 - write a sonnet
A contest entry
- 36 Options Contest! by chasingwhiterabbits.
700 points, ended September 3, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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How beautiful. You write with such feeling and lingering affection, this really makes me smile. You express yourself so nicely too! A beautiful form of writing. Thank you for entering the contest
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this is great,
i especially like the last lines
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This is beautiful. I love sonnets, and this one's very well written. So romantic. Good luck!
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very nice, thank you for the entry
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Once again lovely piece- you've already got my input on this write
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This is such a sweet and beautiful poem. I particularly enjoyed "A heart was never meant to beat alone, / but you’ll never be if I’m by your side. / I’ll be your diamond among all the stones, / I’ll hang tough for every bump on the ride." Also I think it's an Italian sonnet; for the rhyming you seem to have used the variation abbaabbacdcdee. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering my contest!
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With the rest of the piece being so flowery, the phrase "hang tough" in line 13 just doesn't seem to fit in. Very sweet piece. Thanks for entering
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Awwwww, what a sweet romantic poem. I loved the rhyming and this awesome line...
"I’ll be your diamond among all the stones"
nice write!
-GL in contest
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