What makes you think you are entitled to this anymore?
When the door closed, unlike my pillow, you were on the other side.
What makes you think you are entitled to this anymore?
After screams and shouts, unlike long passionate love all hours of night and day we used to make....
What makes you think you are entitled to this anymore?
You miss me like a baby would miss touch.
You want me like weekend on a sunny beach.
You still feel me like an echo of a love song.
What makes you think you are entitled to this anymore?
Please tell me what you think
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What Makes Me Feel Entitled to read your poetry... Cause i am good like this.. HaHa
Your words are sooo real.. nice job!!!
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I LOVE THIS...
<3STEF
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last five lines, especially the middle three ..
.. i don't know if you meant it this way, but a reader could easily see an irony, a 'methinks she doth protest do much' sort of irony ... out of ten lines, this refrain is constant 'What makes you think you are entitled to this anymore?' is repeated four times ... and the title, could be read that you are the one whose free or the other way around or any number ways and I like that ... my mind wandered a little bit during this because it is cool that way and i think you meant it that way ...
i like ... kind of made me hot a little for some reason
good flow, good place for the refrain, or chorus (i get them mixed up
) and well done
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Wow! Very good write, I can just feel the hostility!
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When the door closed, unlike my pillow, you were on the other side. - LOVE IT!
You tell 'em.
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