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Sunset

sunset wraps up day
in brilliant hues that whisper
loon calls out last chance

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Option #4

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  • individuality gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    sunset wraps up day -
    i like the shining light of this first line, how it smiles softly as the day is put to bed with care.

    in brilliant hues that whisper -
    a good continuation on here with the light, hues of spectacular tones, whispering good morrow perhaps?

    loon calls out last chance -
    loon makes me think of the full moon coming, lunatic howls and such whih is a nice sorry great twist to the sun and moon celestial dance.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    I like this sunsets are beautiful and you did a nice job with this one thanks for sharing much love always


  • Errant Panther gold member
    May 29, 2008
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    which option is this for?


    • PinkPony
      May 30, 2008
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      ooops! Option #4, Sir poet.


      • Errant Panther gold member
        May 30, 2008
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        I guess the wording for that option wasn't clear, so I have now edited it. Option 4 was meant for you to begin your poem with the passage given and then take it wherever you wish. you may leave it like this if you want - I won't penalize you for my vague instruction.

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