I walk along the beach to watch the dawn design the sky
And to paint its golden rays with red balloons
I've a notion that from far away the sight will please your eye
When the dawn ignites a stream of bright red moons
Then the cold waves touch my bare toes so I let my cargo free
And a rainbow of emotion greets the day
Watching red balloons head skywards, that are sent to you from me
I find every single part of me at play
Four thousand miles or holding hands the picture is the same
I want to paint my daydreams just for you
One hundred red balloons released, a special sort of game
It's a brand new day I've daydreaming to do.
A contest entry
- Colored Dreams For Sale.. Get Inspired.. by raspberry.
450 points, ended June 13, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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well done and congratulations on the gold ~ LOVE, prettypoetry
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This is beautiful in imagery and presentation. I see why it took gold. Only we don't do that here. The ballons pop and birds eat them and die.
Love,
Amera
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Beautiful imagery
I think you wrote this from sincere inspiration. You are a passionate person who is very in the NOW. That's a compliment because many lose the moment trailing behind in the past or rushing too far ahead in the future. The only thing certain is right now, this moment. You hold on tight and cherish with the true passion of a gifted writer.
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Very imaginative and I like the romantic feel it has, the idea of sending the balloons off to a certain other person and painting your daydreams for her.
Very nice piece.
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this is beautiful... can u have a daydream 4 me where everything works out ok... need a little something right now...... hugs and kisses linda xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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this is beautiful... can u have a daydream 4 me where everything works out ok... need a little something right now...... hugs and kisses linda xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Ah!
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a really wonderfully painted poem. sweet too. LOVE, prettypoetry
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Thank-you
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'ignites a stream of bright red moons'
'a rainbow of emotion greets the day'
This is a wonderful write Jeff-I was sent into heaven reading it-I've printed it off to read again at work in my tea break!! I'm gone.....wow....xxx
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I am immensely impressed with this poem.. Wonderful imagery.. and excellent usage of poetic devices.. Lovely.. Thank you for this entry and special hats off to the last line!!
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One hundred red balloons have been spotted over Atlanta, and one is wearing...gasp...a waistcoat!
This is lovely, Jeff. All daydreams should be this wonderful. Love, lane
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