I'm lost
and broken
but maybe I might
need a muse
to shed some light
just something better
than my useless blight
something unbroken
something right
for it I'll search
throughout the night
life has never seemed good
also not bad
but with added light
it all seems so sad
so I'll work for better
than what I had
What do you think in general? Improvements?
Comments
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wonderful poem once again!
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Nice. This poem screams for a picture of a lighthouse. I kept picturing one while I was reading. Great write, thanks for sharing.
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This is good
True heart feelings makes the best powetry of all .Now you say you are bored and cant seem to think of what to write well you did a bang up job here I thought it was very good . Have you tried to write for any of the contests I am going to write one for Lets Keep It Country thats up right now and get back in the sticks and party down why dont you give it a try as well
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