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~Oneness~

Missing image

         leave your troubles to wither 
         from millennial rust, let me take you away

         I would do it because

         my love is a kind of surrender, a binding, 

         of not just wrists or eyes closed 
         beneath a silk of fear induced excitement 

         but of a union 
         not with god or government 
         or any man-made institutions 
         or intellectual constitutions 
         but of each other, in trust


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11 Lines
Written By: Touchof1der
"cat got fried"
Prompt: Bride
Image Courtesy Of: http://shum23.deviantart.com/art/BRIDE-80651342

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  • Amaranthine Lover silver member
    July 30
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    Very deep and well constructed

  • TXCowgirl
    June 3

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    I love the way you think and the way this makes me think as I read throughout the lines here. Beautiful from beginning to end and a pure pleasure to savor. Go for a gold on this!
    TxCowgirl


  • TheRealDeal
    June 3

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    I love the last stanza. Showing that two who love and trust one another with such completeness and meeting of minds and heart do not need the recognition of any government to prove it is the greatest love two can have. The rest is just a formality or a financial security for some. This one strikes a chord in me that I wasn't quite expecting, funny how that happens. I hope this gets you a nice trophy. It's worthy.
    JLG


  • Beret55 silver member
    June 2
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    You always have such a way with words. They blend together to creat such a beautiful write.

  • darrylblacksr
    June 2

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    Very interesting concept of a union in trust, very well done and wish you the best in the contest. And thanks for sharing it with me...


  • who iam
    June 1
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    "But of a union...in trust" perfectly expressed.
    Well done,and with such strong conviction!

  • faderman1959 silver member
    May 31

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    You captured the essence and feel of this picture perfectly! A union of the heart! Beautifully done my friend! All the best luck in this one!


  • leo2
    May 31

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    B is also for beautiful as in these sentiments you express so eloquently. Best wishes in your union and the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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