Quiet monolith
in desert monastery
--seeking reverence
A contest entry
- Haiku II by Kelli Marie.
1350 points, ended June 2, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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nice haiku . . liked "Quiet monolith" and "seeking reverence" . . good job
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I really enjoy the idea here. But I feel the poem leaves too much to the imagination. If perhaps you put the title in the poem, I believe that would convey your idea better.
And with that... you don't really need a title (which traditionally they didn't use) and it leads the reader's mind then takes them for a turn!
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wow so lovely. your words have a quiet calming sense about them. great write, thanks for sharing.
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A very well written senyru. It seems to whisper to me. Very nice. Thank you for sharing in the contest. Great job.
Kelli
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