cloud enthralling
soft let go
winter calling
silent falling
flakes of snow
wind breath-catching
briskly blow
eddies clashing
tiny, passing
flakes of snow
light igniting
icy glow
landing, lighting
burning, biting
flakes of snow
cold all-stilling
dropping slow
water gilding
freezing, thrilling
flakes of snow
Author notes
MeNoEmo - Ladybug lands on lee
A contest entry
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Comments
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Because I like this poem, I am going to count "flakes of snow" as a prompt, even though my prompt was "snowflakes". Aside from that, I like the piece a lot with its short lines and rhymes. Lots of energy here.
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I absolutely loved the description you used, I Love the snow and this just made me want to go outside and play for hours! Good Luck in the Contest! (BTW I did notice that you didn't write something in your authors notes...)
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This was very good. It was a very quick read and i liked how you repeated the end lines. Thanks for entering!
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I like how I can see what you are writing!
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The imagery and description you have here is very well done, though I miss a little bit of flow in this poem...
thank you for entering the contest!
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Such a delicate poem. I really like this, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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wow i love it. its gawjus.well done i think your going to do well nice work
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This is a wonderfully descriptive write. I love how you described the show. Good job here. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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it was beautiful... but i feel the repitition really took away from the piece. it seemed a little kiddy.
but other than that. i did like this.
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Lovely poem. I think 'blow' should be 'blows', but anyway, this was very good. you captured the impermanence of snow very well and still managed to have spectacular imagery despite the fact that there were no pronouns. Good luck in the contest!
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Wow reading throught these poems gets repetitive. its all about nature. good poem still. -
Hmmm… only 45 words. Lovely words, to be sure, and no blasted pronouns on the verboten list… very good of you. I do like this a lot, but I would have liked a lot more lot! Not going to rule anything out at this stage. Good job S.A.
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Excellent little piece, again the rhyme is great. Good luck
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Very vivid and evocative piece that uses really appropriate imagery and descriptive detail to capture the spirit of winter - not something I want to think about just yet in August! Liked the structure and line arrangement, thought it worked well for the subject matter. Thanks for sharing and good luck in all your contests. Cheers
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I don't even like winter, but I loved this piece. Descriptive and really catchy in all honesty, it's the type of piece I can see myself repeating all throughout the day. Thank you for sharing.
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Nice little piece. Kind of gets me in the mood for winter. Thanks for entering.
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I enjoyed the repetition of "flakes of snow" I got a chill while reading this. It made me dread winter coming. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Ahh, Its winter here..and although it never snows..I wish it did. This is a beautiful piece, almost melodic with a calm undertone. Thankyou very much for this soothing write.
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wow.
i got calm just reading this. i literally got that feeling of winter... waking up in the mornings to get ready for the day... looking outside up in the mounatains and seeing the bare trees with their frosty glaze and the forrest floors sheeted in white.
oy. i really really like this. very beautiful.
wonderful wonderful job!
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Beautiful! I love how you worded it and the slightly seductive flow. Although I'm more of a rain fan than snow, there are moments when its beauty and power really get to me. Great job! Thanks for entering, and good luck.
~Cj
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Amazingly good! like its simplicity.
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
thank you for your entry.
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This is very beautifully written. I like the way you described the flakes of snow. I only seen snow once in my life. Very beautiful! Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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In the second stanza, 'catching' does not really rhyme with 'clashing' or 'passing' perfectly. Other than that, I thought it quite enjoyable!
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I really like this one.
I think that this might be trophy matteral. Thanks for the entry. Very nice poem. Even though I don't like rhyming poems, I liked this one
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You've captured the very essence of snow flakes. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for posting in my contest.
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i lost interest after reading the first few lines - you use no poetic devices, no punctuation, i could go on but i do not see the point.
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I'm sorry to see you didn't like my poem. It was an experiment in a distinctly imitative style that, you are right, is rather skimpy on punctuation. Not to everyone's taste, I suppose. I'm not sure what you meant by "poetic devices" because I would have thought rhyming counted as a poetic device. I will admit, I was rather amused when I returned to my account page and saw that while I had been reviewing your poem, all unawares, you had been reviewing mine. It's a small site, er, world.
Still Anonymous
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