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Hidden Wraith

There are bars on the window that I’m looking through.
I put them there.
It’s easier to stay here, behind the grate.

I don’t want to go outside, it’s too wide-open.
People are there.
I’ll just stay in here and wait.


I don’t like being imprisoned with no appeal.
I have no choice.
Can’t help it, though. I’m scared too much of others.

Sometimes I’m not scared. I feel strong, supreme.
Not often now.
Ashamed, I run for cover.


Even now, I’m frightened of being with people.
I think with cause.
There is no good in their hearts, deep down inside.

If they can, they’ll hurt me just for sadistic fun.
They are evil.
Can you wonder that I hide?


I go out there, they scare me and I want to lash.
Tense, untrusting.
I feel lonely, but I’ll stay in here, safe.

If they see me hide, they’ll laugh, and it always hurts.
I am careful.
Secret, sneaking like a wraith.


They don’t know I watch them from behind the curtain.
They laugh and talk.
Alone, afraid, I stay behind my veil.

Their faces seem so nice, I wish I had a friend.
One to hide with.
Just a wish. I’m in jail.


I promise myself, one day I’ll be strong, and leave.
But it’s a lie.
I can’t get out of the prison I built here.

I’ll hide here in cowardice, till I have to leave.
That’s not a lie.
The bars are made of my fear.

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  • Alittle2lost
    January 29
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    this is really good. i especially like the first stanza.
    thanks for the entry and good luck


  • Painted Nails
    October 18, 2008
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    Great poem! Good luck and thanks for entering my contest!
    Sydney


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Wow.

    I know this feeling... but I've never been able to articulate it the way you have.

    WELL DONE, and good luck


  • nite stalker
    October 7, 2008
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    very raw, far, shame, social phobia, very nicely written


  • LOVELYmurder
    September 23, 2008
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    This is good. I like the raw emotions in it. Thank you for your entry.


  • xXBrutalRomanceXx
    September 20, 2008
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    hm, this is good. i like your emotion. thank you for your entry and good luck!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 27, 2008
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    This is a powerful and intense piece. The impact this can have on someone is massive. Excellent portrayal of emotion and fear. Neat read, good luck


  • Hetha gold member
    August 20, 2008
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    A very good write full of intense emotional imagery. You depict social anxiety disorder very vividly. thank you for entering my contest and good luck.

  • piccola silver member
    August 3, 2008
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    very interesting poem thank you for the entry I enjoyed it very much.


  • Stripes
    August 2, 2008
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    Strong poem. GOOD LUCK!


  • JustsimplyKatiee.
    August 2, 2008
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    good luck.


  • JustsimplyKatiee.
    August 2, 2008
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    good luck.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 21, 2008
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    good use of emotion. a dark write indeed, but well penned


  • Frodofan silver member
    June 16, 2008

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    In the third to last line line, "cowardice" is a noun. You can't be in it. You could have it though.

    The scheme was interesting. It made me think of Monk's brother Ambrose in the TV show (don't know if you've seen it).

    Keep writing.


  • XHollowXEyesX
    June 2, 2008
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    Absolutely love the last line. it tied the whole piece together perfectly and adds so much more emotion and impact to it. I also like how you used a free flowing style, makes it seem so much more real and touching.
    awesome write.
    Thanks for entering
    All thebest
    ~Hollow~

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