I stopped
And in that moment my anguished thoughts got through
I waited
Before speaking, the words I said were few
I listened
Without thinking that all he said was wrong
I cried
Yet in that weeping, he knew that I was strong
In silence
I created a level playing field
In Thought
Avoided anger, where nobody would yeald
In patience
I discovered why everything was wrong
In love
I found true meaning of where I should belong
In faith
I walked a smoother path that led to common ground
In peace
I rescued the true love that turned my life around.
A contest entry
- CAUSE AND EFFECT by Pisces rainbow.
1350 points, ended June 10, 2008, 7 entries
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beautiful
and well thought out
very creative
I TRUELY ENJOYED YOUR LOVELY WRITE
GOD BLESS...
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you have delved into inner thoughts here, haven't you ros, , good thoughtful write .good luck xx
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This is a very wise poem. If only we (I guess meaning I!) could be like that more often. A deep and honest piece. Good luck.
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This is a very different form, I like the abrubt lines separated by smooth flow, tells the message well and sounds terrific.
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Nice try.
The poem was chaotic but not as bad as the others I've read. -
Wow
Absolutely amazing piece of poetry. The rythm was spot on and made the words flow of my tongue.
My favourite part:
"In patience
I discovered why everything was wrong
In love
I found true meaning of where I should belong" -
Nice
I really like this. Keep it up!^_^
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Ros
As always a wonderful read though a little different from the rhyming style. But words of faith , hope and wisdom employed by a truly talented poet that needs more notice I think
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A good title for a thought provoking piece. Too often angry words of retaliation cause more harm than good, avoiding anger and exercising patience is not always easy but cerrtainly paves the way to better understanding.
'In faith
I walked a smoother path that led to common ground
In peace
I rescued the true love that turned my life around.'
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