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The Sitting Tenant

Don't apologise - It's handy that you're late.
It gave me time to mend the garden gate
and do some quick repairs
to the front door and the stairs
(I'd have done more if there'd been a longer wait).

So - let me show you round. Now, first of all
we have this little space they call the hall.
(we don't hang our coats up here,
there just isn't room, I fear,
and, anyway, there's dampness in the wall).

Hang on while I force open the lounge door,
(it sticks) and I must warn you both before
we go in - do mind your head
and be careful where you tread
(there's some places where there's wood worm in the floor).

Perhaps you're right - it's best we just move on.
Well, that's the lounge and hallway that  we've done.
So, follow me down here -
it's rather dark, I fear,
(we can never get this damn light to stay on).

Dah-Dah! - The kitchen. Looking rather nice.
(before you came I scraped the oven. Twice)
 Although I ought to mention
that this wiring needs attention
but I think we've won our battle with the mice.

Central heating? Well, both yes and no.
It's off (though all the forecasts warn of snow).
We're still waiting for the plumber.
Yes, it really is a bummer -
he's reluctant to have yet another go.

 

Now, let me take you upstairs where you'll find
the bedrooms are the oldie worldie kind. . . .
- Oh - You say you've got to go?
Well, do let the landlord know
if you want the place or if you've changed your mind.

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  • Life is a Beach gold member
    July 12, 2008
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    Oh...that house is a real money pit! Funny! I enjoyed your style and rhyme. ***Pam***


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 14, 2008

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    Congratulations on the bronze Jimmy, very well deserved. I wonder if maybe you have been in such a position
    This was a fun read.

    Well done...Sue


  • ShaShay
    June 11, 2008
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    Clever

    Reminds me of an old episode of Leave It To Beaver. I love this ...Good luck in the contest.


  • Peripatetic gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    This is excellent. I wouldn't change a thing. The symbiosis of the passive-aggressive tone works very well with the theme, each taking strength from the other.


  • Sagerider
    May 31, 2008
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    I really like it.

    This was a fun read. Great job.


  • Recluse Writer gold member
    May 30, 2008
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    Many thanks for answering my plea for
    YEP...some great ideas here to keep in mind

    I like the rhyme scheme you have here
    (though a little off in meter)
    Your great ideas make up for that...
    Your manners...well none come sweeter
    Well wishes come time for judging.

    Linda


  • LAPoe gold member
    May 30, 2008
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    Yep.. that ought to do it!

    laurie


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in our fun contest. I wish you the best of luck and I'm sure Recluse will comment when she gets over all the stress of having strangers wandering through the house at short notice


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 29, 2008
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    Hilarious!

    I'm sure the house will sell in a flash...


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Tea Riffick!!!
    And so true to life

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